she spoke but then...
lay strangled
the death drone drumming in her ear
the air
morbid pungent
hollow promises
floating
rotting in their guts
the dirge of
the black waters
inhaling the
fragmented red shards of her being
words extinguished
in shadows
illumined grey
words slayed
violated
extinct
silence reigns
unscathed
unbidden
unchallenged
stoned memories
disappearing in liquid flames
silence reigns
unscathed
unbidden
unchallenged
stoned memories
disappearing in liquid flames
dancing
celebrating
pyre of hope
but she spoke...
17 comments:
pyre of hope..hmm..very true..lotsa freedom given in interpretation..luv it
A sequel is it??
Its Gothiccccccc!!! amazing imagery girl... beautiful expressions...
Its like knowing you're free while imprisoned... < random thought from Shantaram>
@bling
yayy u luv it... :) nw write sumthng on ur blog jaldi se...stop being lazy...
@medhavi
yup...its a sequel...
ehehe...the dark counterpart..heh...
I love how this girl keeps speaking... She hasnt conquered her fears... they are very much a reality for her... but she speaks... thats just beautiful...
i agree with aman there... the best thing about this girl is that she speaks.. a glimpse of idealism in all the gothic imagery.. beautiful hun..
p.s. "stoned memories"
*wink* *wink* :P
hmm...Very dark i must say!.. but nice..ur getting good at this..i expect an autographed book soon.. :P
and i aint gunna analize this stuff.. like aman n isha...i dont even know what they talkin about :P ... but yea from whatever i can get..ur talented..lol.
hmm..yea..nt bt being lazy..dis world lacks inspiration..hmm..
@ aman $ blow...
hehehe...yea..she speaks...n doesnt stop speaking..no matter wat u do to her...hehe...reminds f sum1...(hint hint...she owns the blog ;) )
yayyy...u guys liked it... :)
@ k
im inspired....thnk i will write a book...hehe...1st signed copy reserved 4 u.. ;) ..wotsay.. :)
@ bling...
procrastination feeds on excuses... hehehe... ;)
Hey.
Vanshika this side.
I liked your poem, but because I have trouble following the multiple images and emotions..perhaps you could form a long sentence that could capture all that...
by the way, try Haiku..
Its pretty compact and easy for mind blocks. chek my blog
u seem to be getting caught in one style of writing..which is good..
half words ingnite alot alot of imagination in minds which can be different than ours..
but then also maybe it was required here..as it appears in continuation of the earlier entry...contradicting it..becoming dark.
nevertheless..waiting eagerly for the next one..
ps.are these pics by u??
check my page...its nothing great n intense,but the pics are my work.leave a comment on them.
who's k??
how does he'she know the name "isha"
*screams in paranoia*
hahahaha!! u'll keep guessing :P
who is it?? who is it?? i wanna know! i NEED to know! :P
is it kc?
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